WEDDING

Today, I attendend my brother's wedding. It wasn't my first time to attend a wedding, but I still started to feel a little curious. I've never attend a western wedding, I've just heard something about them from my teacher. I know that traditional Chinese weddings are so different to western ones.

As for traditional Chinese weddings, we have no church, no minister. What we have is a lot of people who gather around the bride and groom, and we express our blessings, and send them presents and flowers.

Then, we see the bride get into the car, which carries her to the groom. When we arrive at the groom's house, people will set off the firecrackers. It's so loud, it nearly leaves me deaf.

So, when night comes, we have a party. Everybody sits around a large table, we eat together, it's noisy, and the atmosphere is hot. Everyone is talking about the bride and the groom. And, at the end of the party, the bride and the groom will serve a tea to everyone one by one, which they do that together.

After the party, my desire to attend a western wedding became stronger. I want to know more about it, know more about the western wedding customs.

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WEDDING

Today, I have attended my brother's wedding. It isn't my first time to attend a wedding, but I still feel a little curious about it. I've never attended a Western wedding before. I just heard something about it from my teacher. I know that Chinese traditional wedding is so different compare to Western.
As for Chinese traditional wedding, we have no church and no minister. What we have is, a lot of people will get around the bride and groom. We express our blessings and send them presents and flowers.
Then, we see the bride get into the groom's car which will carry her to the groom's house. When we arrive at the groom's house, people will set off the firecrackers. It's so loud which will make someone think that they have become deaf. When the night comes, we all have a party. Everybody will sit around a large table then we all eat together. It is not only noisy but the atmosphere is also hot. Everyone are talking about the bride and groom. At the last part of the party, both the bride and groom will serve a tea to everyone who is present at the party. They must do that together.
After the party, my desire to attend a Western wedding got stronger. I want to know more about it. To know more about the Westerm wedding customs.

Concentrate more on tenses. I hope this helps. I think your almost good. Cheer up.

WEDDING

Today, I 'attend my brother's wedding It isn't my first time to attend a wedding, but I still feel a little curious. I've never attend a western wedding, I just hear something about it from my teacher. I know that Chinese traditional wedding is so different the western.
As for Chinese traditional wedding, we have no church,no minister,what we have is, a lot of people get around the bride and groom,we express our bless, send them presents and flowers.
Then, we see the bride get into the car,which, carried her to the groom.When we arrive the groom's house, people will set off the firecrackers, its so loudly, nearly let my deaf .
So, when night comes, we have a party.Everybody sit arond a large table,we eat together, it's noisy, but the atmosphere is hot, eveyong are talking about the bride and the groom.And, at the last of the party, the bride and the groom will serve a tea to everyone one by one, but not they do that together.
After the party, my desire to attend a western wedding get stronger, I want to know more about it, know more about the westerm wedding custom .