Second

Will be the second post. This is my second post.
Day two is beginning to italki.
The people who fix the text of my people gave me a message, Thank you very much!
Will be very helpful.
I'm so very happy!!

This is my second post. This is my second day on italki. (This is my second post and my second day on italki) The people who fixed the text in my last journal sent me a message. Thank you very much! It is (will be) very helpful (to me). I'm so very happy!!

My English is poor.
Convey meaning or not, or is slow to answer the message.
I'm sorry...

My English is poor. I can't convey meaning well, and I am slow to answer messages. I'm sorry...

Now is summer vacation.
I would like to practice English as much as possible so here.
Also want to help the study of Japanese^^

It is summer vacation now. I would like to practice English as much as possible (so here? I don't know what you mean by that ^^) I also want to help people study Japanese^^

I think you are doing great so far! Keep up the good work! :D 

In Japanese, you don't have to say "I" in each sentence, because it is obvious that you are talking about yourself, right? But, in English you have to have an object for each sentence (a noun or pronoun). So in each sentence you talk about yourself, you should use the word "I"! 

私は、ジャスミンです。大学生です。米国人です。お腹がすいた！　= I am Jasmine. I am a college student. I am an American. I am hungry!

I hope this helps you! Let me know if you have any questions :)

Second

This will be my second post.
Day two is beginning on italki. (This sounds a little awkward, try "My second day on italki is starting now." or join it with the sentence before "This is my second post on italki and the beginning of my second day.")

To the people who fixed the text of my last post and sent me a message, Thank you very much!
It will be very helpful for me.
I'm so very happy!! (You can leave out "very", it is not wrong but feels a little unnatural)

My English is poor.
It's hard to convey or read meaning, and I may be slow answering messages.
I'm sorry... ("Sorry about that." would be more colloquial)

Now is my summer vacation.
I would like to practice English as much as possible and also want to help people study Japanese. ^^


This is a image of my favorite singer! !  ("picture" would be more natural than "image")
℃-ute ♥ Suzuki airi -chan ♥
超 kawaii ♥ 笑

Thank you!

I hope you have a fun summer vacation and learn a lot on here =D
あなたの夏休みはたのしたい！がんばって！