First notebook entry: Introducing myself

I'm Yen. I'm 16 years old. I live with my parents and older brother. I study at Marie Curie High School. Why am I learning English? Because I want to learn about (become acquainted with) the culture and become acquainted with (make/meet) many friends (from) around the world. Currently, because of (with) economic development and expansion, the exchange with neighboring countries is essential. Exchanges have created the new friendships and relationships in your life. Because English is the second language of the world, learning English (it) is a necessity (necessary).

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First notebook entry: Introducing myself

I'm Yen. I'm 16 years old. I live with my parents and older brother. I study at Marie Curie High School. Why am I learning English? Because I want to learn about the culture and become acquainted with many friends (from) around the world. Currently, because of economic development and expansion, the exchange with neighboring countries is essential. Exchanges have created the new friendships and relationships in your life. Because English is the second language of the world, learning English is a necessity.

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First notebook entry: Introducing myself

I'm Yen. I'm 16 years old. I live with my parents and older brother. I study at Marie Curie High School. Why am I learning English? Because I want to become acquainted with the culture and make many friends (from) around the world. Currently, with economic development and expansion, the exchange with neighboring countries is essential. Exchanges have created the new friendships and relationships in your life. Because English is the second language of the world, learning it is necessary.

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There are, of course, many different ways to say something in any language, and changing one word can make another incorrect. All there is to do is learn and practice! Please write more entries in the future(: