Introducing my living city

Shanghai is a surperisingly modern and attractive coastal city,with a vast array of commercial buildings that totally fill the landscape. Indeed certain parts of the city,especially at night, such as Huanghai Road,with its bright lights, never ceases to amaze me, no matter how many times I see it.
However, pollution and overcrowding, through, is a serious problem. In fact,it can take two or three hours to get across the city during the peak periods 1. .The pace of life is very fast ,and the competition for jobs is intense, making it a very stressful place to live .Nevertheless,people are quite open-minded,and accepting of the foreigin cultural influences.
I'm not sure if this is a good thing or a bad, because on the one hand traditional customs and cultures are being lost, yet on the other hand, change is a natural phenomenon.
On the whole, it's a good place to live because you can find anything you want here.
Prepared for IELTS

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1. You can also say "rush hour" here

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