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Bad student behavior has turned out to be a severe problem nowadays all around the world.In many countries,despite the different backgrounds and economic conditions(1) of different families,the group of bad behaviored students is becoming larger and larger.It is(2) probably caused by the changeful societies(3), environment and the modern lifestyles. (3)
* 1 - you can say "different socio-economic backgrounds" But yours is not wrong either ! (^__^)
* 2- Try to avoid shorthand
*3 - There is more than one type of society and modern lifestyle
First of all,the speed of Urbanization is getting faster and faster,and the amount of children that each family have has being decreased is on the decline for several years.With one a single child,parents spoil their children(4) too much.Children can get everything they want without any effort(5).This makes children become selfish and self-centered.They don’t understand how to take care of others or how to work in a team.
*4 - 'Spoil' in itself already denotes 'too much'
*5- A better expression can be "Children can get anything they want on a whim"
In the Secondly place,parents are getting much more busier in the modern time(6).They spend a plenty of time on their jobs instead of their children. In circumstances like this,children are often left at home alone without any limitation restrictions.They can do whatever they want to do, led by their immature minds.Of course it always leads to some bad behaviors if they are out of their parent’s control.
*6 - Not wrong, just does not sound natural.
In the third place Finally, media and broadcasting is developing at an amazing speed that we can hardly imagine.On the one hand,it transformed some positive information to children.On the other hand,it also spread some negative information among children and initiate children’s copy. (7)
Bad student behavior has become a severe problem not only for schools and parents but also for the society.It is(2) very significant to correct their bad behaviors and lead them on their own way.To solve this problem,the best solution is to give those children more care and love.What’s more,parents should put their children in the first place instead of living in the small circle of their work.Maybe spending more time with their children and educating them to in the right direction is the most efficient way to change this situation.
*- 'Transformed' is more like a word for change of state.
*7- On the one hand, the media has proven to be beneficial as a visual learning aid for children. On the other hand, it has also proven to be detrimental by freely showing negative images, possibly encouraging copycat behaviour.
Very nicely done ! To be honest, your article requires very minimal correction. But at your request, i got anal(slang) with the details. Keep up the good word !
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