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a lovely day It is the fourth day after the Spring Festival. After having a wonderful ,busy ,cold but also warm holiday, i restart my studying plan. What such a coincidence is I met one of my best friends when i just entering the library.She came here to prepare her next toefl text, in order to get the qualification for exchangeing to America.When we took a break,we talked a lot about many interesting thing around us,Such as one of our friend will get married, somebody have came back home from abroad to attend a blind date.How time flies! It seems like that i just graduated from senior school yeaterday, and i will almost graduate from university tomorrow! I couldnt deny that how time flies! Finished studying and gossip , i bought 4 packs of cigarettes for my best dude far away in Totonto .I wish he will be happy when he receive my present, it's not easy to smoke democatic cigarette there.

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It should be "somebody has come...."
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A Lovely Day

It is the fourth day after the Spring Festival. After having a wonderful, somewhat busy, cold but also a warm holiday, I restarted my studying plan. What such a coincidence it was today is as I met one of my best friends, when I just entered entering the library. She came there to prepare for her next TOEFL test text in order to get the basic qualification for exchangeing to studying in America. When we took a break from study, we talked a lot about many interesting things around us, such as one of our friends is getting married  soon will get married, somebody have come came back home from abroad to attend a blind date. How time flies! It seems like that I just graduated from a senior school college yesterday yeaterday and I am going will almost to graduate from another university tomorrow! I couldnt deny that how time flies the influence of time on our lives! 
After finishing Finished studiesand gossip , I bought 4 packs of cigarettes for my best dude friend far away in Totonto. I wish hope he will be happy when he will receive my present. It is it's not easy to smoke democratic cigarette there. 

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Two basic suggestions: 1. "I" should always be capital. 2. Leave a space after punctuation mark and not before it.
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