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Question: Would you agree that watching athletes compete in sporting events is a sheer waste of time?
My answer: I agree because, firstly, instead of watching athletes compete in sporting events people can read the greatest writes of history thereby to develop their brains, imagination and knowledge. They can learn the results of competitions in the Intenet or in the sports news but they can't learn the feelings, sensation, thought of an author people.
The Secondly, on time while a person competes, he is forgets about his family, work, housework.
The Thirdly, watching athletes compete in sporting events influents on health because as you watch competitions you get nervous so you lose nervous cells when you sit, not move. It'd better to go for a walk or to ski.
Finally, I want to say if you love to watch competitions in sporting events please don't forget about your health, progress of intelligence and life.