My first part time job

Today is November 6, 2011 .After some preparation, I  have officially become a part-time teacher. Just a moment ago, I signed a one-year contract that made me so happy .This is a responsibility，I must try my best to do it well . I have some new foreign friends, who are very kind , we have been language partners to contact and help each other ,share happiness or sorrow. The world has become smaller ,thanks to this platform. I will try my best to learn English. My dear friends when you think of me , know that I will always miss you .

My First Part-Time Job

Today is on November 6, 2011. After some preparation, I will officially become a part-time teacher. It feels like it was,just a moment ago, when I signed the one-year contract that made me me so happy. This was a proper responsibility, so I had to try my best to do it well. And Also, In the meantime, I found some new foreign friends, who are very kind; we have been language partners keeping contact and helping each other, sharing happiness or sorrow. The world has become nearer. Thanks to this platform, I want to try my best to learn English. My dear friends, when you think of me, just let me know... I always miss you.

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My first part time job

Today is November 6th, 2011 .After some preparations, I officially became a part-time teacher.Just a moment ago,I signed a one-year contract that made me so happy .This is a responsibility ,I must try my best to do it well .I have some new foreign friends ,they are very kind ,we are language partners contacting and helping each other ,sharing happy and sorrow.The world becomes smaller.Thanks for this platform ,I will try my best to learn English.My dear friends ,whenever you think of me ,just let me know , I always miss you .

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My First Part-Time Job

Today is on November 6, 2011. After some preparation, I officially become became a part-time teacher. Just a moment ago, I signed a one-year contract that made makes me me so happy. This is a responsibility, and I must try my best to do it well. And while At the same time, I have some new foreign friends. They are very kind. We have been language partners to contact and help each other, and share haapy happiness or sorrow. The world has become nearer smaller. Thanks for to this platform, I will try my best to learn English. My dear friends, when you think of me, just let me know. I will always miss you.