I realise this is probably very late, but here goes anyway...

Script for Israel presention - Part 1

Hi, my name is Roee.  This sounds a little more formal.
I'm here to tell you about ourselves and about the state of Israel. What do you know or have heard  know about Israel? (Sun associations) <--? sun?

I live here (point) in a city called Haifa. Here you can see some of the view we see from our window every day.
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This is our school, where your 10th grade buddies are going to visit. Gonna is very poor English, and makes the speaker sound a little stupid. I advise never using it.
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Haifa is a melting-pot of cultures and religions. For example Christians, Jews, Arabs and Bahais.  The Bahai Gardens in Haifa are the center of the Bahai religion in the world.
Here are some photos
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Haifa has many museums such as the National Maritime Museum, the Tikotin Museum of Japanese Art, the Haifa Museum of Art, MadaTech the Israeli National Museum of Science and more... 

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Not only does Haifa have museums, but Haifa is the place for recreation for all the people who living in north Israel. Haifa has 24/7 clubs, pubs, restaurants, cinemas and more...
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Israel is a state of immigrants. Jewish people from all over the world have come and still do come there ever since Israel was established. Every group of Jews added another type of food to the Israeli cuisine. 

The Yemenite people brought Jachnun (a dish prepared from rolled dough which is baked on very low heat for about ten hours). 
The Europeans brought Gefilte fish (a poached fish mince stuffed into the fish's skin).
The Spanish Jews brought Burke (baked or fried filled pastries made of a thin flaky dough).
The Maghreb (north African) people brought Couscous (a dish of semolina with vegetable stew spooned over it).
The Iraqis Jews brought Sabich (pita stuffed with fried eggplant).
The American Jews brought the cottage cheese which has become the most popular cheese in Israel.

As you can see in the map, there are four Arabian countries which surround Israel: Lebanon, Syria, Egypt and Jordan. Their cuisine influences a lot about much of the Israeli cuisine as follows: 

From Lebanon we have taken the mujaddara (which consists of lentils cooked together with groats, wheat or rice, garnished with roasted onions that have been sauteed in vegetable oil). 

From Egypt we have taken the hummus and the felafel.
Even from Turkey we have taken halva (various types of dense, sweet confectionery).
All these kinds of foods are mixed up into one unique cuisine - the Israeli cuisine. Also the Israelis have created their own food such as ptitim (toasted pasta shaped like rice), cherry tomato (tomaccio), shkedei marak (soup mandel - crisp mini croutons), bissli and bamba. Bamba has become the most popular snack in Israel. We have brought you some bamba and bissli so you can taste them.

Good effort - I realise your comment above is also part of the speech, but that's probably enough from me. You seemed to have trouble with verb tenses, especially present perfect - do you want some tips?