About optimism
When I was 12 years old I remember having a very optimistic mindset. Children don't worry about things as adults do... They can enjoy every single minute of the present moment... This is one of the things that I most miss from my childhood, I didn't use to be afraid of failures or tough moments which could happen in the future.... And I used to have very positive results compared to my expectations. Sometimes I wonder Why adults have such a complex and boring expectation about the future using complex ways to get it meanwhile children don't think a lot about tomorrow and aways have simple ways to get what they want...
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About optimism
When I was 12 years old I remember having a very optimistic mindset(1). Children don't worry about things in the way that as adults do. They can enjoy every single minute of the present moment. This is one of the things that I most miss the most from my childhood, I didn't used to be afraid of failures or tough moments which might could happen in the future. And I used to have get very positive results compared to my expectations. Sometimes I wonder why adults have such a complex and boring expectations about the future, finding complicated ways to achieve it, while using complex ways to get it meanwhile children don't think a lot about tomorrow and aways have simple ways to get what they want.
(1) This sentence would be better if you changed the order. "I remember having a very optimistic mindset when I was twelve years old". If you say "when I was twelve I remember" it sort of changes the tense from past to present and reads strangely.
Your writing is really good. It flows well and reads quite naturally. Well done!
- You shouldn't use ellipses (...) For periods/fullstops, they aren't interchangeable. Ellipses are only used when partially quoting (e.g. "When I was 12... very optimistic mindset), or creatively to add an emphasis on a pause in speech (e.g. "I... umm... I... don't know" he said, struggling to get the words out). Just use a period (.) instead.
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