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Minimalism Minimalism The concept of Minimalism became popular around the mid-eighties. It is a notion whereby people live intentionally limiting their buying and spending. It also means engaging in only necessary life activity. Salem’s parents are from the middle-income group, both employed at the government office. Through the financial challenge, they got experience leading a family with the limited resource without knowing the concept of minimalism. However, she now leads an independent life and earning income; recalls how they were wisely prioritizing spendings to manage and keep the family needs. Following-her parents’ footsteps, she is conscious of her finances. She spends only on the items that she needs rather than wants. In her perspective, owning fewer things enables her to have meaningful life experience, human interaction, and also is her way to contribute to the ''Green Living''. She highly discourages the current trend whereby the youngsters are indulging in excessive shopping and are hoarding unnecessary items. Her advice to friends and family is not to be taken away by the swamp of promotional sales and miss on the quality of life as they are distractions.

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Minimalism

Minimalism

The concept of Minimalism became popular around the mid-eighties. It is a notion whereby people live intentionally limiting their buying and spending. It also means engaging in only necessary life activities.

Salem’s parents are from the middle-class, both employed at the in government offices. Through the financial challenge, they got experience leading bringing up a family with the limited resources without knowing the concept of minimalism.

However, she now leads an independent life and earns an income. She recalls how they were wisely prioritizing spendings to manage and keep the family needs. Following her parents’ footsteps, she is conscious of her finances, She spending only on the items that she needs, rather than wants.

In her perspective, owning fewer things enables her to have a meaningful life experience, human interaction, and also is her way to of contributing to the ''Green Living''. She highly discourages the current trend whereby the youngsters are indulging in excessive shopping and are hoarding unnecessary items. Her advice to friends and family is not to be taken away in (or "get carried away") by the swamp of promotional sales and miss out on the quality of life, as they are distractions.

Hi Muna, really good. In general you write quite well. I think here it is a question of learning expressions, and the best way to do that is to read a lot.
Just be careful with the article "the". If we are talking about something in general, we don't need it. For example: youngsters.
Keep practicing! Simon.

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