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Self care Self-care Over the last fifteen years, we have seen quite a lot of TV programs and articles about wellbeing and self-care. Many professionals and others with a mere passion for the topic became wellbeing coaches promoting and advising different routines to bring a good quality of life. I am sure it was not only me who has found it hard to identify which of the methods are the best that suits them personally and physically. I remember, there were times that I have made myself a guinea pig with the main expectation to get a quick fix for the issues that I had on my health. Thankfully, I had not faced bad results as I was very selective in my trials. Earlier last year, I made a very wise decision not to follow any guru who proclaims s/he has the best with alternative solutions. I started to listen to my body, hydrate it with enough water, eat lots of green leafy vegetables and fruits. To top it all, I started to do moderate exercise. After consistently following these simple routines created and used me, I was able to see progress on my health and overall wellbeing. All the changes that I was looking forward, was achieved through my dedication. I now practice these routines daily and have a good quality lifestyle. If you think you are struggling like I was, learn from me. I once was there in the same position and was able to reverse my health condition. If I can do it, I am sure, you can also do it!

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The writing is very good and understandable! Many of the corrections I made are on sentences that are technically correct, but could be improved for clarity.

I emboldened the word "mere", because I do not think it reflects what you mean. Mere usually means something very little, or very unimportant. If I were an all-powerful god, I may laugh at the attempts of "mere mortals" to fight me. If this IS what you meant, and you are saying that these people had passion but nothing else (like qualifications), you should add that to clarify.
"Many so-called "professionals", and others who had passion, but no real qualifications for the topic, became wellbeing coaches, promoting and advising different unfounded routines that they promised would improve lives."
This way the emphasis is on the fact that these are not truly experts, that they have passion but not qualifications, and that their promises are empty.

Beginning of the second paragraph is not incorrect, but is very awkward and cumbersome. "I am sure I am not the only one who had difficulty identifying which of the many methods would suit me best" would be better.

"Have" is in bold because it would be better to use "had" in this instance, since you are "remembering" (aka using past tense).

Underlined again some awkward wording. The message is understandable but can be simplified. "[...] with the main expectation being that I could get a quick fix for my health issues".

For the third paragraph, I would change "a" to "the" because it is the only decision that is relevant to readers, so it is THE decision that you made (in regards to your topic/article).
You are critiquing people who claim to be gurus, so to focus on that I would either use the term "self-proclaimed guru" or simply put quotation marks (" ") around the word. This is highlighting the fact that they call themselves gurus, but aren't actually experts in their field.
S/he is correct, but most writing is now shifting to the gender neutral singular "they". So, the sentence would be,
"Earlier last year, I made the very wise decision not to follow any "guru" who proclaims they have the best alternative solutions".

Your next paragraph was great, I just added two words to it to make it clearer. I put "and" in, because without it your sentence is fragmented. Then, I finished the idiom "to top it all off", so that the sentence reads more how you intended it. Without "off" it reads as if moderate exercise is better than all the other things you are doing (by "topping them all"), instead just of something you are doing in addition to those other things.

You do not need to clarify that your routines were used by you, since you have already said that you are following them. "After consistently following these simple routines I created, [...]" would be better.

"If I can do it, I am sure you can do it, too!" is less awkward than "If I can do it, I am sure, you can also do it!"

Great job! Your English is excellent. I hope this helps you get your meaning across better!
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Self care

Self-care

Over the last fifteen years, we have seen quite a lot of TV programs and articles about wellbeing and self-care. Many professionals and others with a mere passion for the topic became wellbeing coaches, promoting and advising different routines to bring a good quality of life.

I am sure it was not only me who has found it hard to identify which of the methods are the best that suits them personally and physically. I remember, there were times that I have made myself a guinea pig with the main expectation to get a quick fix for the issues that I had on my health. Thankfully, I had not faced bad results as I was very selective in my trials.

Earlier last year, I made a very wise decision not to follow any guru who proclaims s/he has the best with alternative solutions. I started to listen to my body, hydrate it with enough water, and eat lots of green leafy vegetables and fruits. To top it all off, I started to do moderate exercise.

After consistently following these simple routines created and used me, I was able to see progress on my health and overall wellbeing. All the changes that I was looking for were forward, was achieved through my dedication. I now practice these routines daily and have a good quality lifestyle.

If you think you are struggling like I was, learn from me. I once was there in the same position and was able to reverse my health condition. If I can do it, I am sure, you can also do it, too!
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great essay - no mistakes.....well done. Be careful of the tenses, switching between the past and present perfect.

Self care

Self-care

Over the last fifteen years, we have seen quite a lot of TV programs and articles about wellbeing and self-care. Many professionals and others with a mere passion for the topic became wellbeing coaches promoting and advising different routines to bring a good quality of life.

I am sure it was not only me who has found it hard to identify which of the methods are the best that suits them personally and physically. I remember, there were times that I have made myself a guinea pig with the main expectation to get a quick fix for the issues that I had on my health. Thankfully, I had faced bad results as I was very selective in my trials.

Earlier last year, I made a very wise decision not to follow any guru who proclaims s/he has the best with alternative solutions. I started to listen to my body, hydrate it with enough water, eat lots of green leafy vegetables and fruits. To top it all, I started to do moderate exercise.

After consistently following these simple routines created and used me, I was able to see progress on my health and overall wellbeing. All the changes that I was looking forward, was achieved through my dedication. I now practice these routines daily and have a good quality lifestyle.

If you think you are struggling like I was, learn from me. I once was there in the same position and was able to reverse my health condition. If I can do it, I am sure, you can also do it!

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