Please correct my informal email
Hi Lou!
I was thrilled to get your letter. I’m very happy that you will stay in my area for a month.
I’m sure you will enjoy the city and your holidays, because it is a really interesting place to visit.
The city has changed little in the last years, because is really old and this is part of its charm. But if you are really interested in found out the changes when can do a tour called “before and after” I think that we would like it.
Regarding to the most interesting things to photograph, I reckon that each one like different things. If I were you, I’d suggest you to visit the most important cultural places and then go for a walk to see what the city has to impress you.
I’m looking forward to seeing you!
Lots of love,
Laura.
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Please correct my informal email
Hi Lou!
I was thrilled to get your letter. I’m very happy that you will stay in my area for a month.
I’m sure you will enjoy the city and your holidays, because it is a really interesting place to visit.
The city has changed little in the last years, because is really old and this is part of its charm. But if you are really interested in found finding out the changes when then we can do a tour called “before and after.” I think that we would like it.
Regarding to the most interesting things to photograph, I reckon that each one everyone like different things. If I were you, I’d suggest you to that you visit the most important cultural places and then go for a walk to see what the city has to impress you.
I’m looking forward to seeing you!
Lots of love,
Laura.
Great job, Laura! Let me know you want any clarifications for my corrections! :)
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Please correct my informal email
Hi Lou!
I was thrilled to get your letter. I’m very happy that you will stay in my area for a month.
I’m sure you will enjoy the city and your holidays because it is a really interesting place to visit.
The city has changed little in the last years (or ¨in recent years¨) because it is really old and this (¨that¨) is part of its charm. But if you are really interested in found finding out about the changes, when we can do a tour called “before and after” -- I think that we would like it.
Regarding to the most interesting things to photograph, I reckon that each one (¨both of us¨ or ¨each one of us¨ or ¨everyone¨) likes different things. If I were you, I’d suggest you to I would visit the most important cultural places and then go for a walk to see what the city has to impress you. (this sentence could start with simply ¨I suggest that you visit the...¨ or ¨I suggest visiting the...¨ or ¨If I were you, I´d visit the...¨)
I’m looking forward to seeing you!
Lots of love,
Laura.
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Green shows things that should be added. Red shows words that should be erased. Yellow shows optional changes, comments, or additional possible ways to say the same thing.
¨With regards to the most interesting things...¨ or ¨Regarding the most interesting things...¨ are two similar options for how to start that sentence.
It doesn´t really make sense to say ¨If I were you, I´d suggest that you visit...¨ because if you were Lou then you would be the person needing to receive suggestions (in this situation where Lou is the visitor). However, if Lou was telling you that his grandparents were coming to visit his city and he didn´t know what to recommend that his grandparents do, in that situation you could say, ¨Lou, if I were you, I´d suggest that they visit...¨
If you have any questions about any of the changes I have suggested, feel free to ask me either as a comment or by sending me a message.
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