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Before any trip I feel excited about new adventures. There is so much passion on travelling, especially if it is travel to the dream destination.
I dream about Hawaii. I often look at unbelievable pictures and realize that “Yes!” That is what fire me up! Hawaii…
Paradise on Earth. I Imagine a land where years of history sits side by side with five-star luxury and untouched islands. It seems like nothing can prepare for the beauty of Hawaii’s world-famous sandy beaches. Everything is impressive: golden sand, the gentle azure, crystal blue waters, palms. I imagine myself lying on white sand of Waikiki and waiting for sunset with tropical cocktail in my hand. True happiness.
There is something to do in Hawaii any time of the day. Hawaii is home to a rich cultural heritage as well. Artists from all over the world have been inspired by the beauty and tribal history of Hawaii. I heard about "Lapita" that is a movement of Polynesian tribes from one island to another. So for me “Aloha” is not just word, it is a call for peace and love. And I love Hawaiian Lei. Lei are garlands made of flowers, leaves which are worn around the neck. They range from simple strings of blossoms to complex garlands of native leaves and plants. Lei have always been important symbols in Hawai’i. They are worn by everyone with pride on Lei day.
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Island
Before any trip I feel excited about new adventures. There is so much passion in travelling, especially if it is travel to the a dream destination.
I dream about Hawaii. I often look at unbelievable pictures and realize that “Yes!” That is what fires me up! Hawaii…
Paradise on Earth. I Imagine a land where years of history sits side by side with five-star luxury and untouched islands. It seems like nothing can prepare you for the beauty of Hawaii’s world-famous sandy beaches. Everything is impressive: golden sand, the gentle azure, crystal blue waters, palms. I imagine myself lying on the white sand of Waikiki and waiting for sunset with a tropical cocktail in my hand. True happiness.
There is something to do in Hawaii any time of the day (or "There is always something to do in Hawaii"). Hawaii is home to a rich cultural heritage as well. Artists from all over the world have been inspired by the beauty and tribal history of Hawaii. I heard about "Lapita" that which is a movement of Polynesian tribes from one island to another. (or "Which is about Tribes moving from one island to another") So for me “Aloha” is not just word, it is a call for peace and love. And I love Hawaiian Lei. Lei are garlands made of flowers and leaves which are worn around the neck. They range from simple strings of blossoms to complex garlands of native leaves and plants. Lei have always been important symbols in Hawai’i. They are worn by everyone with pride on Lei day.
Brilliant, not much to correct really. It's very well written. There were a couple of mistakes with the definite/indefinite article but otherwise pretty flawless.
I have made suggestions where I thought the language read a little less naturally. I hope it helps.
Good work.
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Before any trip I feel excited about new adventures. There is so much passion oin traveling, especially if it is travel to the dream destination.
I dream about Hawaii, I often look at unbelievable pictures and realize that “Yes!” That is what fires me up! Hawaii…"
Paradise on Earth. I Imagine a land where years of history sits side by side with five-star luxury and untouched islands. It seems like nothing can prepare for the beauty of Hawaii’s world-famous sandy beaches. Everything is impressive: golden sand, the gentle azure, crystal blue waters, palms. I imagine myself lying on white sand of Waikiki and waiting for sunset with tropical cocktail in my hand. T - true happiness.
There is something to do in Hawaii any time of the day. Hawaii is home to a rich cultural heritage as well. Artists from all over the world have been inspired by the beauty and tribal history of Hawaii. I heard about "Lapita" that is a movement of Polynesian tribes from one island to another. So for me “Aloha” is not just word, it is a call for peace and love. A, and I love Hawaiian "Lei". Lei are garlands made of flowers, and leaves which are worn around the neck. They range from simple strings of blossoms to complex garlands of native leaves and plants. Lei have always been important symbols in Hawai’i. They are worn by everyone with pride on Lei day.
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Island
Before any trip I feel excited about new adventures. There is so much passion in travelling, especially if it is travelling to the a dream destination.
I dream about Hawaii. I often look at unbelievable pictures and realize that “Yes!” That is what fires me up! Hawaii…
Paradise on Earth. I imagine a land where years of history sits side by side with five-star luxury and untouched islands. It seems like nothing can prepare you for the beauty of Hawaii’s world-famous sandy beaches. Everything is impressive: golden sand, the gentle azure, crystal blue waters, palms. I imagine myself lying on the white sand of Waikiki and waiting for the sunset with a tropical cocktail in my hand. True happiness.
There is something to do in Hawaii any time of the day. Hawaii is home to a rich cultural heritage as well. Artists from all over the world have been inspired by the beauty and tribal history of Hawaii. I heard about "Lapita" that is a movement of Polynesian tribes from one island to another. So for me “Aloha” is not just a word, it is a call for peace and love. And I love Hawaiian Lei. Lei are garlands made of flowers and leaves which are worn around the neck. They range from simple strings of blossoms, to complex garlands of native leaves and plants. Lei have always been important symbols in Hawai’i. They are worn by everyone with pride on Lei day.
Hi Jahan, really good.
Just be careful with the articles "the" for something specific, and "a" when it is not important which one.
Note that in American English they would spell travelling with only one "L", but most other countries write it with "ll". That is because we normally put a double consonant after a vowel if we want it to be a short sound. Compare the pronunciation of chatting, (short "a" sound) with hating, (long "a" sound).
Keep practicing! Simon.
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Lovely writing Jahan :). I just made a few corrections. I so much want to travel soon as well! To long have I been stationed in the other southern tip of the world... May the winds carry me, may they carry us all to our goals, dreams and deepest desires :)
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