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Another one TOEFL step. Independent Essay Independent essay. Opinion. Task: Some students apply for the admission only to their first-choice school, while others apply to several schools. Which plan do you agree with, and why? Be sure to include details and examples to support your opinion. Essey: Usually there are two main scheme according to those students apply to universities. Some of them prefer to choose one particular place for their future study and try to be enrolled strictly there. On the contrary, other students try to success applying to several colleges or universities at the same time. In my opinion, the second scheme much more corresponds to me due to different reasons. First of all, it is a pragmatic cause. That is, chances to get scholarship tremendously increases when you try to get in several universities. In other words, the possibility to be admitted for study is higher when you do so. At the same time, when you apply, you usually interact with people from universities who are in charge to help newcomers and, therefore, know everything about they place of work. Likewise, asking questions to this important persons, thoroughly analyzing their answers, you become more familiar with your desirable study program. Thus, when you know much more information about every university you've chosen for application, you are able do make more wise decision. On the other the hand, there is the third, most important, reason why I would like to deal with several universities. Since I don't dwell on a place, but pay more attention to self knowledge, people, skills, and educational process, It doesn't matter for me in what university I will study next year. And this approach was maintained by well-known scientist, Richard Feynman, who studied at three different places in US.

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Another one TOEFL step. Independent Essay

Independent essay. Opinion.
Task: Some students apply for admission only to their first-choice school, while others apply to several schools. Which plan do you agree with, and why? Be sure to include details and examples to support your opinion.
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Usually, there are two main schemes according to students applying to universities. Some of them prefer to choose one particular place for their future study and try to be enrolled only there. Alternately, other students try to achieve success by applying to several colleges or universities at the same time.
In my opinion, the second scheme corresponds to me more for different reasons. First of all, it is a pragmatic course of action. That is, chances to get scholarship tremendously increase when you try to get in several universities. In other words, the possibility to be admitted for study is higher when you do so.
Secondly, when you apply, you usually interact with people from universities who are charged with helping newcomers and, therefore, know everything about their place of work. Likewise, asking questions to these important people, thoroughly analyzing their answers, you become more familiar with your desired study program. Thus, when you know much more information about every university you've applied to, you are able to make a more informed decision.
And then there is the third, most important, reason why I would like to deal with several universities. Since I don't dwell on just one place, but pay more attention to studying, people, skills, and the educational process, it doesn't matter to me in which university I will study next year. And this approach was maintained by the well known scientist, Richard Feynman, who studied at three different places in the US.

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Hello, Stanislav. Would you like your readers to suggest only grammatical changes or both grammar and style-related changes? I haven't done corrections before so I don't want to change your notebook entry too much trying to "fix" it. It's pretty well-written already. Thanks!

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