How I lost 10 kg or the feast of San Giovanni
Honestly, I wanted to tell you today about how I lost 10 kilograms without any kind of phisical exercises or a diet. Usually this topic attracts a lot of attention and I really fond of attention. However something strange happened unexpectedly
This morning when I went out to the beach at 5-30 in the morning with my dog, I saw something very strange. There were a lot of people on the beach. These were not just teenagers who usually stay on the beach after a sleepless night to meet the dawn and have some romantic time, but they were quite decent people indeed.
After having returned home, I looked at the Internet what it was. It turned out that it was the feast of San Giovanni. What a shame! I did not know about such a great festival!
In Russia, the shortest night of June 21 is considered to be the special, when magic flowers bloom in the forest and you can find a pot of gold .
So I decided to look carefully at the beach tomorrow just in case .May be there is a pot of gold somewhere . Or at least a lonely princess.
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How I lost 10 kg, or the feast of San Giovanni
Honestly, I wanted to tell you today about how I lost 10 kilograms without any kind of physical exercises or a diet. Usually this topic attracts a lot of attention and I am really fond of attention. However something strange happened unexpectedly. (This isn't wrong but it sounds strange. I would use either "something strange happened" or "something unexpected happened". I think that when something unexpected happens it implies that it's strange, so you don't need to use the word strange).
This morning, when I went out to the beach at 5-30 (5:30) in the morning with my dog; I saw something very strange (If you say "This morning" at the start of the sentence, then "in the morning" is redundant). There were a lot of people on the beach. These people were not just the usual teenagers, who usually stay on the beach after a sleepless night to meet the dawn and have some a romantic time. but They were quite decent people indeed. (This reads a little strangely. From context below I think you mean they were normal people, or party goers. Perhaps you could say "They were just normal people"?)
After having returned home (this is fine but I would say "after returning home" to make it less wordy), I looked at the Internet to see what it was. It turns out that it was the feast of San Giovanni. What a shame! I did not know about such a great festival!
In Russia, the shortest night of - June 21- is considered to be the special, when magic flowers bloom in the forest and you can find a pot of gold .
So I decided to look carefully at the beach tomorrow just in case ("So I decided to carefully check the beach tomorrow, just in case"). May be there is a pot of gold somewhere, or at least a lonely princess.
This is very well written, John. I've made a few corrections to the punctuation for you, but almost all other changes are stylistic. What you wrote was not wrong, but I think that, hopefully, my changes will help you with your sentence structure and word flow. I hope it helps your already very good English.
One thing I noticed, that may be a typo, is that you put a space before a period/full-stop. There is only a space after a period.
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