What I like to eat
I watched a movie earlier this afternoon. The title of the movie was quite strange and weird, but it was a movie of my favorite genre. I liked that tension-raising editing (?) and video. I was so concentrated on the movie that I became hungry after finishing it. "Should I order something to eat?" I just cooked fried rice with eggs. I think I'm going to go grocery shopping tomorrow to get a carton of milk. As I usually stay at home all day, I tend to find nutritious food materials. In America, some grocery shops offer a bag with a handle, but others don't. I'm going to buy a big cloth shopping bag so that I would be able to put heavy things into it.
*Please correct my sentences in a more natural way! Thanks in advance.
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What I like to eat
I watched a movie earlier this afternoon. The title of the movie was quite strange and weird, (say one or the other. Using both words is redundant) but it was a movie of my favorite genre. I liked that tension-raising editing (?) and video. (I think what you’re trying to say is “suspense” or “special effects”) I was so concentrated on the movie that I became hungry after finishing it. "Should I order something to eat?", I thought. (The quotation seems out of place if you don’t follow up with narration.)
(At this point of the notebook entry, you completely change tenses. Choose whether you want to tell the story is past tense, like above, or is present tense, like below. Otherwise there’s a strange break and it is confusing to read the shift in verb tense.)
I just cooked fried rice with eggs. I think I'm going to go grocery shopping tomorrow to get a carton of milk. As I usually stay at home all day, I tend to find nutritious food materials. In America, some grocery shops offer a bag with a handle, but others don't. I'm going to buy a big cloth shopping bag so that I would be able to put heavy things into it.
*Please correct my sentences in a more natural way! Thanks in advance.
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