The introduction of an 1000 words research essay
Need some academic correction in grammar, words choice. :)
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A supervised injection sites (SIS) is a facility aims for “harm reduction” had emerged since 1970s (Macdonald 2011) in The Netherlands. Until 2019, there are 100 SIS all over the world, mostly established in Europe, and there is only one SIS in North America where located in Vancouver, Canada. Are the world benefited from the emerging of SIS? If yes, why there is only one SIS established in North America during the past fifty years? Considering the origins of SIS, the individual outcome of harm reduction and the impact of the communities around SIS, the expansion of SIS should be suspend and reconsidered after more comprehensive surveys and studies.
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The introduction of an 1000 words research essay
Need some academic correction in grammar, words choice. :)
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A supervised injection site (SIS) is a facility whose aim is for “harm reduction” had emerged in the 1970s (Macdonald 2011) in the Netherlands.
Until 2019, there are 100 SIS all over the world, mostly established in Europe, and there is only one SIS in North America, which is located in Vancouver, Canada. Is the world benefiting from the emergence of these SIS sites? If yes, why is there is only one SIS established in North America during the past fifty years?
Considering the purpose of SIS, the individual outcome of harm reduction and the impact of the communities around SIS, the expansion of SIS should be suspended and reconsidered after more comprehensive surveys and studies.
****I was a little confused wither last paragraph but I changed it to what I thought you were trying to say. Hope it is correct. (Do you think it is not working and is not a good idea?) . Good job! Difficult topic.
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Thank you! Astrid :)
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This seems very standard and nice!
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