Thank you for your corrections(A comment of film)
Yesterday was my day off. I watched a Mongolia movie named Golden Treasure online as usual. At first I was almost persuaded to quit by the name. However, I was just too lazy to choose another one. To my surprise, the film attracted me at the moment I turned on it.
For the whole comment, I will begin with the theme which is about gender discrimination. The main actress’s father A, who is the most famous wrestler of their grassland, has won all villagers’ respect except the main actor’s father B. What’s more, Father B even mocks him that Father A only has three girls without a son. Father A is so extremely sorrow and disappointed by the fourth daughter’s birth that he announces he finally gets a son by pretending his youngest girl to be a boy whose name is Tai Ping, our main character. Tai Ping knows clearly that she is female while she has to show up as a male at home and in public. She only can wear a long wig and woman’s clothes, follow her mother way to boil tea like other common women in a cave alone. Everything is calm until Hang Lu, father B’s son, finds out her secret. They fall in love naturally, and spend a span of happy life. As expected, someone discover the truth and then tells father A purposely. Thus a confront occurs between Tai ping and her father, ending with Tai ping’s isolation in the cellar. However, his father accepts the reality in the end, our main actors also will lead happy life as well.
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Thank you for your corrections(A comment of film)
Yesterday was my day off. I watched a Mongolia movie named Golden Treasure online as usual. At first I was almost persuaded to quit by the name. However, I was just too lazy to choose another one. To my surprise, the film attracted me at the moment I turned on it.
For the whole comment, I will begin with the theme which is about gender discrimination. The main actress’s father A, who is the most famous wrestler of their grassland, has won all villagers’ respect except the main actor’s father B. What’s more, Father B even mocks him that Father A only has three girls without a son. Father A is so extremely sorrow and disappointed by the fourth daughter’s birth that he announces he finally gets a son by pretending his youngest girl to be a boy whose name is Tai Ping, our main character. Tai Ping knows clearly that she is female while she has to show up as a male at home and in public. She only can wear a long wig and woman’s clothes, follow her mother way to boil tea like other common women in a cave alone. Everything is calm until Hang Lu, father B’s son, finds out her secret. They fall in love naturally, and spend a span of happy life. As expected, someone discover the truth and then tells father A purposely. Thus a confront occurs between Tai ping and her father, ending with Tai ping’s isolation in the cellar. However, his father accepts the reality in the end, our main actors also will lead happy life as well.
Thank you for your correction.
(To be continued.)
Very nice summary! The movie seems very interesting and you did a great job explaining it clearly. However, there were two mistakes. One of them was, “Father A is so extremely sorrow and disappointed by the fourth daughter’s birth that he announces he finally gets a son by pretending his youngest girl to be a boy whose name is Tai Ping, our main character.” This is a run on sentence. It could have been broken up by saying “Father A is so extremely sorrow and disappointed by the fourth daughter’s birth. Father A finally announced that he got a son, by pretending his youngest girl to be a boy whose name is Tai ping, our main character”.
The second mistake was “As expected, someone discover the truth and then tells father A purposely.” could have been said as “As expected; someone discovered the truth about Tai Ping and told father A, purposely”. To make it more clear for the reason when trying to explain the “truth” and who exactly you’re talking about. Overall, you did a very good job. Keep it up!
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