Winter holidays!
I went to Athens in December with a couple of friends, it is said that Athens is a place full of monuments so we decided to go there. We took a flight from Milan, as soon as we arrive we decided to go to bed cause we were tired. At first glance, I found the city very beautiful, one of my favorites in Europe! In the following days, we took a ride through the city and we met our friend Carlo. The weather was nice so we often drank in the many Bars that were there under the sun, even though it was winter there was a really pleasant climate. Unfortunately, one evening I have been robbed, sadly these things happen when you are abroad, but that didn't stop me from having fun. Even if I was a little afraid, I had a good time. After these 5 days we flew to Berlin. The first time i was in Berlin I was 19 years old. I lived there for 2 years, I worked there and I studied there. I really love Berlin! It was nice to be back. My friend Alberto still living in Berlin so I stayed by him. It was new year's day so we organized dinner and finally, I had the opportunity to eat with my old colleagues I hadn't seen in a long time. After eating we went to celebrate, but we split up because some wanted to go to one club and some to another. We had a nice party, I met many people, it was super cool!
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Winter holidays!
I went to Athens in December with a couple of friends. It is said that Athens is a place full of monuments so we decided to go there. We took a flight from Milan, as soon as we arrived we decided to go to bed because we were tired. At first glance, I found the city very beautiful, one of my favorites in Europe! In the following days, we took a ride through the city and we met our friend Carlo. The weather was nice so we often drank in the many bars that were there under the sun, even though it was winter, there was a really pleasant climate. Unfortunately, one evening I have been was robbed, sadly these things happen when you are abroad, but that didn't stop me from having fun. Even if I was a little afraid, I had a good time. After these 5 days we flew to Berlin. The first time i was in Berlin I was 19 years old. I lived there for 2 years, I worked there and I studied there. I really love Berlin! It was nice to be back. My friend Alberto is still living in Berlin so I stayed by with him. It was New Year’s day so we organized dinner and finally I had the opportunity to eat with my old colleagues I hadn't seen in a long time. After eating we went to celebrate, but we split up because some wanted to go to one club and some to another. We had a nice party, I met many people, it was super cool!
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Winter holidays!
I went to Athens last in December with a couple of friends. It is said that Athens is a place full of monuments so we decided to go there. We took a flight from Milan. As soon as we arrived arrive we decided to go to bed because cause we were tired. At first glance, I found the city very beautiful, one of my favorites in Europe! In the following days, we took a ride through the city and we met our friend Carlo. The weather was nice so we often drank went to many bars there. that were there under the sun, Even though it was winter, the weather was really pleasant. there was a really pleasant climate. Unfortunately, one evening I was have been robbed, sadly these things sometimes happen when you are abroad. But that didn't stop me from having fun. Even if I was a little afraid, I had a good time. After these 5 days we flew to Berlin. The first time I was in Berlin, I was 19 years old. I lived there for 2 years, I worked there and I studied there. I really love Berlin! It was nice to be back. My friend Alberto is still living in Berlin so I stayed with by him. It was New Years's Day so we organized dinner and finally, I had the opportunity to eat with my old colleagues I haven't hadn't seen in a long time. After eating we went to celebrate, but we split up because some wanted to go to one club and some to another. We had a nice party, I met many people, it was super cool!
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blue should be in lower case
I see that you are quite advanced so as seen by your inclination to use longer and more complicated sentences. However, sometimes it is nice to use simpler and direct to the point sentence. It is more understandable that way. But when you absolutely need to use sentences with more than one clause (or thought), be sure to use conjunctions. That way your sentences will flow more naturally. You are in the right track; keep improving! I hope this helps.
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Winter holidays!
I went to Athens in December with a couple of friends. It is said that Athens is a place full of monuments, so we decided to go there. We took a flight from Milan, and as soon as we arrived we [decided to go] to bed because we were tired. (or you could simply say, we went to bed)
After these 5 days we flew to Berlin. The first time I was in Berlin I was 19 years old. I lived there for 2 years. I worked there and I studied there. I really love Berlin! It was nice to be back. My friend Alberto is still living in Berlin so I stayed by with him. It was New Year's Day, so we organized dinner and finally I had the opportunity to eat with my old colleagues that I hadn't seen in a long time. After eating dinner we went to celebrate, but we split up because some wanted to go to one club and some to another. We had a nice party, and I met many people. It was super cool!
Sounds like you had a great vacation! Please let me know if you have any questions about my edits.
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