My IELTS Writing Task2: Looking for feedback and correction Hello italki users, especially the native English speakers, I am preparing for IELTS exam in next weekend and I want to improve my writing part. Your feedback and correction are greatly welcome and it would help me improving the writing skills. Thank you :) Question: Some people work for the same organization all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organizations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. My writing: Basically, when people get their first job in their working life, they might have a question whether they will continue work for the same company for the rest of their working life or they should move to different organization gaining the better opportunity. Some people argue that working for the different company can accelerate their career path, however, it’s not always true for everyone. Working in the same company can encourage people to be the specialist on their career. It’s certainly true that people who passionate in their first job and continually develop their talent in the particular area will pay off in form of incentives or promotion. On the other hand, if people become familiar to the process and feel comfortable with their colleagues, they might behave inactively for new challenges of company. This consequently end up with boredom and maybe become the obstacle for company growth. However, people who jump to work with different companies, they might not know yet about their passionate job. This group of employees will take more time to figure out what they are talented on by going around with different job and jump into various industry. Furthermore, when people always looking for the better workplaces, mostly, people will not put their all afford on their current job since their attitude might be negative with their present career. Hence, their performance will unable to shine out to their management team. In conclusion, I personally think that people can enjoy and grow their career if they found their right job. This is no matter if they got the right job with their same or different companies, however, once they got it, working on that job in all their working life will enhance them of joyful and happy working experiences. (294 words)