Bob's recovery
Bob squinted, slowly coming round. He was addled and his vision was blur. He saw a silhouette by him before he had to shut his burning eyes again. He didn't recognize where he was. When he started to gain senses back, he felt his right hand was clasped firmly. A writhing sound met his ears, which he later recognized as his own. There was pain all over his body. His whimper apparently had caused an excitement in the room as he could tell from the imperceptible squeals and creaks from the chairs which are pushed back. When he resumed all his senses properly, he saw a pair of eyes looking at him solicitously. "Hi" she said warily. It all came to Bob suddenly, quickening his pulse. Fleeting visions of the appalling explosion in the lab fluttered through his mind. It was a total ruckus, a disaster. "How is others?" he asked hoarsely. "Everyone is well and sound, Rose was here just 5 minutes ago to check on you." she replied reassuringly.
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Bob's recovery
Slowly coming around, Bob squinted, he was addled and his vision was blurred. He saw a silhouette beside him before he had to shut his burning eyes again. He didn't recognize where he was. When he started to regain his senses he felt his right hand was clasped firmly. A writhing sound met his ears, which he later recognized as his own. There was pain emanating all over his body. His whimper apparently had caused excitement in the room as he could tell from the imperceptible squeals and creaks from the chairs which were pushed back. When he recovered all his senses properly, he saw a pair of eyes looking at him solicitously. "Hi" she said warily. It all came to Bob suddenly, his pulse quickening. Fleeting visions of the appalling explosion in the lab fluttered through his mind. It was a total ruckus, a disaster. "How are others?" he asked hoarsely. "Everyone is well and sound, Rose was here just 5 minutes ago to check on you." she? the voice replied reassuringly.
Very good, although people do say coming round it is more accurate to say "come around" = to regain senses again after being knocked out or after an accident. Bob cannot in these circumstances control his pulse it would quicken automatically by itself. "his pulse quickening"
Who is she? it is a little unclear.
{" Rose was here just 5 minutes ago to check on you." she replied reassuringly."}
She is referring to Rose as another third person/party, it could not be Rose: If it was you need to rephrase the last sentence. If the voice was female you need to clarify this.
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Bob's recovery
Bob squinted, slowly coming round. He was addled with pain and his vision was blurred. He saw a silhouette by near him before he had to shut his burning eyes again. He didn't recognize where he was. When he started to gain his senses back, he felt his right hand was clasped firmly. A whimpering writhing sound was in met his ears, which he later recognized as his own. There was pain all over his body. His whimper had apparently caused an excitement in the room, as he could tell from the imperceptible squeals and creaks from the chairs as they were which are pushed back. When he resumed got all his senses back properly, he saw a pair of eyes looking at him with concern. solicitously. "Hi" she said warily. It all came to Bob suddenly, quickening his pulse. Fleeting visions of the appalling explosion in the lab fluttered through his mind. It was a total ruckus, a disaster. "How is are the others?" he asked hoarsely. "Everyone is fine and well and sound, Rose was here just 5 minutes ago to check on you." she replied reassuringly.
Well done. Your English is very good and very descriptive.
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Bob's recovery
Bob squinted, slowly coming round. He was addled and his vision was blur. He saw a silhouette by him before he had to shut his burning eyes again. He didn't recognize where he was. When he started to gain senses back, he felt his right hand was clasped firmly. A writhing sound met his ears, which he later recognized as his own. There was pain all over on his body. His whimper apparently had caused an excitement in the room as he could tell from the imperceptible squeals and creaks from the chairs which are pushed back. When he resumed all his senses properly, he saw a pair of eyes looking at him solicitously. "Hi" she said warily. It all came to Bob suddenly, quickening his pulse. Fleeting visions of the appalling explosion in the lab fluttered through his mind. It was a total ruckus, a disaster. "How is others?" he asked hoarsely. "Everyone is well and sound, Rose was here just 5 minutes ago to check on you." she replied reassuringly.
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