A trip to Lhasa.
I have been to Tibet two years ago.At that time, I had just finished the college entrance examination.It took me fifty-two hours from Guangzhou station to Lhasa station.Along the way, I met tourists from all over China.The scenery along the way is gorgeous as well.when I reach the Lhasa station.I was really excited at that time.and my wonderful trip has begun.
I stayed in Lhasa for about fifteen days.what did I think of Lhasa？well,Lhasa is a place full of natural beauty.The mountains here are amazing,the sky is very blue,the water is quite clean as well.There is a strong flavor of Buddhism here in Tibet.I have been to the Jokhang Temple in Lhasa.There are a lot of Buddhists worship in the Jokhang Temple.I also went to the base camp of Mount Everest, about 5000 meters above sea level.Unfortunately, I had altitude sickness.It was a really painful stay in the base camp of Mount Qomolangma.But when I went down to the lower altitude, my altitude sickness disappeared.
It was an unforgettable trip.
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A trip to Lhasa.
I went to Tibet two years ago.At that time, I had just finished the college entrance examination.It took me fifty-two hours from Guangzhou station to Lhasa station. Along the way, I met tourists from all over China.The scenery along the way was gorgeous as well. When I reached the Lhasa station.I was really excited at that time.and my wonderful trip has began.
I stayed in Lhasa for about fifteen days. What did I think of Lhasa？Well,Lhasa is a place full of natural beauty.The mountains here are amazing,the sky is very blue,the water is quite clean as well.There is a strong flavor of Buddhism here in Tibet. I have been to the Jokhang Temple in Lhasa.There are a lot of Buddhists who worship in the Jokhang Temple.I also went to the base camp of Mount Everest, about 5000 meters above sea level.Unfortunately, I had altitude sickness.It was a really painful stay in the base camp of Mount Qomolangma.But when I went down to the lower altitude, my altitude sickness disappeared.
It was an unforgettable trip.
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Great job! I'm so jealous I'd love to go to Tibet it's on my list! A couple of things:
Be careful with past tenses. I went to Tibet two years ago - because we are speaking about a completed action and giving it a time - two years ago. You could say "I have been to Tibet" to mean that at some point you have travelled there but when you are specifying when you went there you have to use the past simple.
"Painful stay" isn't really right here. Stay is only a verb and we can't use it as a noun. I'd use the noun "trip" here which is similar to a journey or experience. However the adjective "painful" also doesn't quite work because that's something we humans feel. We could use it with something like "memory" for example a painful memory is something which hurts you emotionally to think about.
So you could describe that night at the base camp as miserable, horrible ... or something similar. I hope this helps!
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