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We live in an ever-changing world. More and more technology was innovated in the world that will change our life. One of technologies is self-driving car that free from time of commuter. These people can save time for rest or working on the car. It can avoid traffice accidents by artificial intelligence on car's computer.
When Self-Driving car arrives to office. Just drop commuter off. Commuter never park his car as before. Self-Driving car can join uber platform to service guests that make money for you. It will pick you up while you off duty.
Self-Driving car has great appeal for long time commuter, it can save our life from commute time. So Self-Driving car will improve our life.
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Hi Patrick, I see you've bumped this up the list. Let's have a look.
First up, I have no problem understanding your meaning. Good work.
But, there are lots of little changes to make it sound "natural English".
I'll try and keep your vocabulary and sentence structure intact as much as possible.
We live in an ever-changing world. More and more technology was innovated in the world is invented that will change our life lives. One of these (OR the) technologies is the self-driving car. This will free us from commuting time. that free from time of commuter. These people can People will save time for resting or working on in the car. It can will avoid traffice accidents by using artificial intelligence on the car's computer.
When a Self-Driving car arrives to at an office. Just it will just drop the commuter off. The cCommuter will never park his car as before. A Self-Driving car can then join an uber platform to service guests that and make money for you. It will pick you up while when you go off duty.
A Self-Driving car has great appeal for a long time commuter,. it It can save our life from commuteing time. So the Self-Driving car will improve our life. lives.
I'm not totally sure about all the "the" and "a" Self-Driving Cars. But it sounds good to my ear.
Commute time or commuting time. That might be a local preference.
can to will: I've changed the tense to the future, as it hasn't happened yet.
life to lives: You use "we" and "our", so plural "lives"
go off duty: even better: get off work OR finish work
If you have any questions, please ask.
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