A dairy.I wanna learn more advanced and native expressions from you.Thank you.
Today is the first day after I made my plan.But let's put the plan aside first and talk about the weather.It's really cold today.The temperature is two to nine degrees Celsius.I wore three pieces of clothes but still felt cold and trembled sometimes.Strong winds made the situation more harsh to tolerate.Thanks to my robust constitution, I was energetic all day despite the coldness. Now, let's move back to the plan I mentioned at the beginning.Last night, I suddenly realized I have been wasting my time and doing nothing.Except finishing my homework which is demanded, I just let my time slip away. As a college student, I should have work harder to fulfill my dream and become a prominent person. Nevertheless, at least I realized it and it won't be too late. Today is the first day to follow my plan. And I did a good job. I believe I can do better tomorrow. Good night.
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Hi Jerry,
You have a great idea here. May I ‘jam’ on it?
1) You may have meant diary. A diary is notes to yourself. A dairy is a farm with many cows.
So here goes:
Yesterday, I made a plan. Today, the weather is cold to distraction. The temperature is two to nine degrees Celsius. I wore three layers of clothing but still felt cold, shivering, especially when there were strong winds. It was hard to tolerate.
You may have wondered about my plan. It was just last night, when suddenly I decided to start a diary. I realized I have been wasting my time, becoming easily distracted-like about the weather- doing nothing. Sure, I finished my homework, which is demanded, Other than that, I just let my time slip away. As a college student, I must work harder to fulfill my dream; to become a prominent person. So that is why I began this diary. To hold myself accountable. <<Could you say more on this; what kind of prominent person? an energy physicist, a doctor, a actor, a politician? Maybe you just need to decide what your field it! >> Nevertheless, at least I realized how important it is to me to make something of myself. It’s not too late. Today is the first day to follow my plan. And I did a good job. I began my diary. I believe I can do better tomorrow. Good night.
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Hi Jerry! You're written text is not bad. I wonder what "advanced and native expressions" would look like for you? I speculate that, with any native speakers of a language, the spoken words are not so formal. "It's so cold that my teeth are chattering, and they're still in the glass."
I edited to say that I live in Canada. It can get very cold here too.
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