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Please give me some advice, thx Technology has improved dramatically, like the Internet. We can search for a lot of information to help us do more meaningful things. While some people say it was harmful to society. As for me, I would definitely think the internet provides more valuable information than problems. The internet gives us an opportunity to access the latest news about the world. Twenty years ago, people got information from the radio or newspaper, but it was so late when we knew about the big event. Today the situation was different. Through Weibo or the online website, we can know someplace had an earthquake 1minute ago. It was unimaginable in the past. As we know about the tragedy, we can help the suffering people immediately. It was great progress to reduce the damage to that site. Thanks to the Internet, we know about the catastrophe and we can do something to help the people there. On the other hand, the Internet is beneficial to education. It is common sense that education is the most important thing about one country's development. Due to the advanced technology, students who study in a poor area can use the Internet to get information about the useful classes. I saw some classrooms in my hometown recently. Teachers use the computer or the advanced educational equipment to teach students a math class or Chinese literature class. Students can know more information from the teacher's powerpoint which gets its valuable source from the internet. What a great thing that students can learn more from the Internet. Following the doctor's advice of the agent, he saved the patient. It was such a relief. After that incident, the doctor tried to learn more about this type of disease from the Internet then he became a more experienced doctor. All these reasons are supporting that the internet gives a lot of valuable information to people. We can't deny this fact and we should try to use it more often.

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Please give me some advice, thx

In the last few years, technology has improved dramatically. Take for example, the internet. We can search for a lot of information to help us do more meaningful things. While some people say it is harmful to society. In my opinion, I think the internet provides more valuable information than problems.

The internet gives us an opportunity to access the latest news about the world. Twenty years ago, people got information from the radio or newspaper, but it took a long time for people to learn of big events. Today the situation is different. Through Weibo or other online websites, we can know almost instantly when someplace had a big event, like an earthquake. This was unimaginable in the past. Because we can know about a tragedy as soon as it happens, we can help the suffering people immediately. It is a sign of great progress that we can then reduce the damage to the site. Thanks to the Internet, we know about catastrophes and we can do something to help the people there.

Moreover, the internet is beneficial to education. It is commonly understood that education is the most important thing to a country's development. Due to advanced technology, students who study in poor areas can use the Internet to to be taught useful classes. Recently, I saw some classrooms in my hometown. Teachers are using the computer or advanced educational equipment to teach students math clases or Chinese literature classes. Students are getting more useful information from teachers' powerpoint presentations. The information for these presentations are sourced from the internet. It is great that students can learn more from the Internet. Another example, is that after following the doctor's advice of the agent, he saved the patient. It was such a relief. After that incident, the doctor tried to learn more about this type of disease from the Internet. Afterward, he became a more experienced doctor.

All these reasons support that the internet gives a lot of valuable information to people. We can't deny this fact and we should try to use it more often.
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你的内容好棒!我只整理你的语法。 And in English if my Chinese doesn't make sense - The content of your paragraph is very good. I only corrected some more minor issues in your grammar. 加油学习英文!

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