Stedents' choices after graduation
What is shown in the column chart above clearly indicates that striking changes have taken place in the students' choices after graduation between 2013 and 2018 in a certain university. As is revealed by the diagram, there has been a dramatic jump of 7.3% from 26.3% to 34.0% in taking further education. By contrast, the statistics of pursuing a job declined by 7.4% from 68.1% to 60.7% during the period. At the same time, students' choices of starting a business remained steady under 3%.
From the statistics given above, we may conclude that the number of students taking further education are increasing. Which would lead to the decline of pursuing a job. At least 2 fundamental causes could contribute to this phenomenon. One the one hand, with the rapid development of economic and artificial Intelligence, students are facing the pressure of serious employment situation. This pressure would force them to seek higher education in order to be more competitive in the forthcoming projects. On the other hand, taking further education would broaden their horizons and improve their academic level and practical skills, which would help them to know this world better.
Taking all these factors into consideration, in my point of view, the impacts of students' choices depends on could they achieve the balance between academic knowledge and practical skills.
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Students choices after graduation
What is shown in the column chart above clearly indicates that striking changes have taken place in the students' choices after graduation between 2013 and 2018 in a certain university. As is revealed by the diagram, there has been a dramatic jump of 7.3% from 26.3% to 34.0% in those taking further education. By contrast, the statistics of those pursuing a job declined by 7.4% from 68.1% to 60.7% during the same period. Further, students' choices of starting a business remained steady - under 3%. (Just used further to prevent tautology)
From the statistics given above, we may conclude that the number of students taking further education is increasing.(Number is singular) This may well lead to the decline in number of students pursuing a job. At least 2 fundamental causes could contribute to this phenomenon. One the one hand, with the rapid development of economic and artificial Intelligence, students are facing the pressure of a decreasing number of job opportunities. This pressure may well force them to seek higher education in order to be more competitive in the forthcoming projects??? . On the other hand, taking further education will broaden their horizons and improve their academic level and practical skills, which will in turn help them to know this world better.
Taking all these factors into consideration, in my point of view, the impact of students' choices depends on whether they can achieve a balance between academic knowledge and practical skills or not. Not entirely sure what you mean by this, as you are talking about impact, which has a future reference, and gaining knowledge. Not sure from the above how they may be related, not what exactly that impact is. Perhaps you have described it else whre.
Excellent English - just need to ensure clarity and conciseness.
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Students' Choices After Graduation
The data shown in the chart above clearly indicates that striking changes have taken place in the students choices after graduation between 2013 and 2018 in a certain university. As is revealed by the diagram, there has been a dramatic jump of 7.3% from 26.3% to 34.0% in taking further education. By contrast, the statistics of pursuing a job declined by 7.4% from 68.1% to 60.7% during the period. At the same time, students' choices of starting a business remained steady at under 3%.
From the statistics given above, we may conclude that the number of students taking further education is increasing. Which would lead to the decline of pursuing a job. At least 2 fundamental causes could be contributing to this phenomenon. One the one hand, with the rapid development of the economy and Artificial Intelligence, students are facing the pressure of a difficult employment environment. This pressure might force them to seek higher education in order to be more competitive in the forthcoming years. On the other hand, taking further education would broaden their horizons and improve their academic level and practical skills, which would help them to know this world better.
Taking all these factors into consideration, in my point of view (in my opinion也可以), the impacts of students' choices depends on whether they can achieve a balance between academic knowledge and practical skills.
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