Making long sentence with present/past participles
I want to make a long sentence using the present participles and past particles. please correct if I use awkward and wrong words/expressions^^
1. Having been suffering serious diarrhea since this morning, I'm lying on my bed that has small apertures made by one of my dogs with my dog Dong-gun, a son of Kong-Dol which is 8 years old, is chewing his dog chew, in fact, which was Kong-Dol's one that I bought yesterday evening, which was the coolest day in this month that has a lot of extremely hot days relatively more than other years.
1-1 I have been suffering severe diarrhea so I'm lying on my bed since this morning
1-2 the bed has small holes that made by my dogs
1-3 I'm lying on my bed with my dog named Dong-Gun and he is a son of Kong-Dol which is 8 years old
1-4 Dong-Gun is eating dog chew which was Kong-Dol's one that I bought yesterday
1-5 yesterday was the coolest day in this month and this month has many hot days relatively more than other years
Thanks, ^^
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** When natives speak, we tend to use a lot of contractions. So instead of saying "I have," try to use "I've" to sound more natural.
1-1 I have been suffering severe diarrhea so I'm lying on my bed since this morning
I've been suffering severe diarrhea since this morning, so I've been lying on my bed.
1-2 the bed has small holes that made by my dogs
My bed has small holes that were made by my dogs.
1-3 I'm lying on my bed with my dog named Dong-Gun and he is a son of Kong-Dol which is 8 years old
I'm lying on my bed with my dog, Dong-Gun. Dong-Gun is the son of my other dog, 8 year old Kong-Dol.
1-4 Dong-Gun is eating dog chew which was Kong-Dol's one that I bought yesterday
I bought a new chew toy for Kong-Dol yesterday, but Dong-gun is chewing on it now.
1-5 yesterday was the coolest day in this month and this month has many hot days relatively more than other years
Yesterday was the coolest day yet this month. This year has had many more hot days relative to previous years.
** I used "yet" when saying "coolest day yet this month," because this month has not finished.
Also, people usually don't use the word "apertures" to talk about holes (unless you want to sound fancy, but people might not understand you.) It's mostly used to talk about photography.
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