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The Advantages of Telecommute Nowadays, the technology develops so fast that people use advanced technology to facilitate their lives, such as communicating with their friends and families any time. Technology makes the world smaller and some people have advocated to work at home by computers because of the advantages. Firstly, it is flexible for people to do their stuffs. For the moms, they can take care of their babies while working at home. It is hard for career women to balance family issues and working stuff. If they work at home, they can manage their personal things and job. Men also can make a contribution to taking care of the family chores. Secondly, telecommuting can win more time for the workers and improve efficiency. Every day, people need to spend much time in the traffic, sometimes if the traffic is congested, they need to waste more time. So working at home can save the hours on traffic and focus their attention on work. In the future, Internet will go much further and telecommuting will be the mainstream.

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The Advantages of Telecommuting

Nowadays, the technology develops so fast that people use advanced technology to facilitate their lives, such as communicating with their friends and families any time (more natural to delete this). Technology makes the world smaller and some people have advocated to work at (at is ok but from is better) from home by using their computers because of the many advantages this brings.
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Firstly, it is makes it more flexible for people to do their stuffs go about their daily routine. For the moms, they can take care of their babies while working at home. It is hard for career women to balance family issues (issue is more like problem) commitments and work ing stuff matters. If they work at from home, they can manage their personal things matters and job work tasks simultaneously. Men also can make a contribution to taking care of the family chores.

Secondly, telecommuting can win more save valuable time for the workers and improve efficiency. Every day, people need to spend much time in the traffic, . Sometimes if the traffic road is congested, they need to waste more time. So working at from home can save the hours on traffic commuting/travelling to work and the workforce can focus their attention on work.

In the future, the Internet will go much further and telecommuting will be the mainstream.

It is quite common to use, "Traffic congestion". Example : How to reduce traffic congestion? The traffic congestion issue is getting worse and worse.
But Traffic is congested" doesn't sound right to me. Better way is "the road/s is/are congested."
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In addition to Greg's corrections: Some people have advocated working from home on their computers....

If the road is congested, they waste more time....
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谢谢
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that's good
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thanks

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