Road to IELTS_Task 1
The chart provides information on men and women in further education in Britain in three periods, also comparing the number of people for each category studying full-time and part-time.
The graph shows that the number of men in further education studying part-time decreased from 1970/71 to 1990/91, while an opposite trend was registered for women’s education. Indeed, the number of women in further part-time education highly increased over the three periods, reaching a pick in 1990/91 with over a million of women studying part-time. Such comparison does not apply to full-time education, as the chart shows a common trend for both men and women. The number of full-time students for each category steadily grew during the time considered, however a sharper increase particularly interested women in further education, whose number doubled from almost 100.000 in 1970/71 to over 200.000 in 1980/81.
Overall, female students in 1990/91 were more engaged in education than their male counterpart, either surpassing or reaching the same level achieved by men respectively in part-time and full-time education.
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Road to IELTS_Task 1
The chart provides information on men and women in further education in Britain in three periods, also comparing the number of people for each category studying full-time and part-time.
The graph shows that the number of men in further education studying part-time decreased from 1970/71 to 1990/91, while an opposite trend was registered for women’s education. Indeed, the number of women in further part-time education highly substantially/significantly increased over the three periods, reaching a pick peak in 1990/91, with over a million of women studying part-time. Such comparison does not apply to full-time education, as the chart shows a common trend for both men and women. The number of full-time students for each category steadily grew during the time period considered. [Style: it reads more easily as 2 shorter sentences] However, a sharper increase particularly interested applies to* women in further education, whose number doubled from almost 100.000 in 1970/71 to over 200.000 in 1980/81. [In the UK/US/Ireland/Australia/etc we write 100,000 and 200,000 with commas. Using dots is only in Europe outside of the UK. https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Decimal_separator]
*You could also say "A sharper increase is observed in women in further education..." (just another idea)
Overall, female students in 1990/91 were more engaged in education than their male counterparts, either surpassing or reaching the same level achieved by men respectively in part-time and full-time education respectively. [you don't need "either" because this is kind of a list, with "respectively" at the end]
This is really excellent writing. I'm sure many native English-speaking students could not write something so eloquent!
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