Please, could a native speaker correct and improve this? Thanks in advance.
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I met Olivia in Bruges, Belgium. She took me to a lovely pub, where the local people gather, where we tasted Belgian beers and cheeses. That was exactly what I was looking for. I really enjoyed my time with her, she is very friendly. She was really great to hang out with. Hope to see you soon again, and that time, I promise you that we will drink red wine and not beer. My home is your home.
As I left, I felt that I had discovered a magical place, and that I should have spent more time chatting with Olivia as well as in Bruges.
(Conocí a Olivia en Brujas, Bélgica. Me llevó a un encantador pub, donde se reúnen los lugareños, donde probamos cervezas y quesos belgas. Eso es exactamente lo que estaba buscando. Realmente disfruté mi tiempo con ella, es muy amable y dulce. Realmente la recomiendo para un hangout. Espero volver a verte pronto, y esa vez, te prometo que beberemos vino tinto y no cerveza. Mi casa es tu casa.
Cuando me fui, sentí que había conocido un lugar mágico, y que debería haber pasado más tiempo con Olivia, así como en Brujas.)
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Please, could a native speaker correct and improve this? Thanks in advance.
(If you need it, please read the text in Spanish below)
I met Olivia in Bruges, Belgium. She took me to a lovely pub, where the local people gather, and where we tasted Belgian beers and cheeses. That was exactly what I was looking for. I really enjoyed my time with her, she is very friendly and sweet (you need a full stop instead of the comma in this sentence - this is a called a "comma splice", which you could Google to learn more about). She was really great to hang out with. Hope to see you soon again soon, and that this time, I promise you that we will drink red wine and not beer (it sounds odd when you switch to "you" but I'm sure it makes more sense in context - I see the Spanish does the same thing). My home is your home.
As I left, I felt that I had discovered a magical place, and that I should have spent more time chatting with Olivia as well as and more time in Bruges.
(Conocí a Olivia en Brujas, Bélgica. Me llevó a un encantador pub, donde se reúnen los lugareños, donde probamos cervezas y quesos belgas. Eso es exactamente lo que estaba buscando. Realmente disfruté mi tiempo con ella, es muy amable y dulce. Realmente la recomiendo para un hangout. Espero volver a verte pronto, y esa vez, te prometo que beberemos vino tinto y no cerveza. Mi casa es tu casa.
Cuando me fui, sentí que había conocido un lugar mágico, y que debería haber pasado más tiempo con Olivia, así como en Brujas.)
Pocos errores, Richie. Bien hecho.
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Please, could a native speaker correct and improve this? Thanks in advance.
(If you need it, please read the text in Spanish below)
I met Olivia in Bruges, Belgium. She took me to a lovely pub, where the local people gather, where we tasted Belgian beers and cheeses. That was exactly what I was looking for. I really enjoyed my time with her, she was very friendly. She was really great to hang out with. I Hope to see her again soon, and that time, I promise you that we will drink red wine and not beer. My home is your home.
As I left, I felt that I had discovered a magical place, and that I should have spent more time chatting with Olivia as well as spent more time in Bruges.
(Conocí a Olivia en Brujas, Bélgica. Me llevó a un encantador pub, donde se reúnen los lugareños, donde probamos cervezas y quesos belgas. Eso es exactamente lo que estaba buscando. Realmente disfruté mi tiempo con ella, es muy amable y dulce. Realmente la recomiendo para un hangout. Espero volver a verte pronto, y esa vez, te prometo que beberemos vino tinto y no cerveza. Mi casa es tu casa.
Cuando me fui, sentí que había conocido un lugar mágico, y que debería haber pasado más tiempo con Olivia, así como en Brujas.)
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