Bye Bye Home!
Tomorrow I have to go to another city which my university is located.
My exams will start and I am far away for two weeks from my family.
I know that it is pretty good for me to being in another city and being far, because it makes me responsible and independent. I learned how I can manage my money and time in here and I learned to become more stronger so that I can solve my problems easily.
for those who aren't Iranian or they don't know Iranian's culture, I have to say that in Iran Most of the children are living with their parents until their marriage.
We are totally attached to our family even when we are 25!
So I have to admit that living in a different city gave me the chance of being free and independent.
although it is hard living lonely but I thank Allah for giving me this opportunity.
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Bye Bye Home!
Tomorrow I am have to going to go to another city which where my university is there located.
My exams will (Because your exams have been scheduled already and the time is exact you must use present simple form which indicates the future like transportation timetable or other schedules. WILL is used for uncertain future) start next 2 days. (point an exact date for scheduled events) and I am far away for two weeks from my family.
I know that it is pretty good for me to being (After infinitive form you are not allowed to use Gerund form) in another city and being (When you use and or as well as to connect to similar things, they must be in the same form such as noun with noun, adjective with adjective and the like. For instance: A man and a woman, being and having, not being and have which will destroy your grammar.) far away, because it makes me be more responsible (Don't forget to use a main verb in your sentence) and independent. I learned how I can to manage my money budget and time in here and Moreover, (Using linking words like moreover, likewise, furthermore, in addition, and ... will help your writing be better and will help your coherence and cohesion.) I learned to become more stronger than before (After writing or saying THAN as you would compare two different things you must point it out. For instance your current situation and previous one) so that I can solve my problems easily.
for those who aren't Iranian or they don't know Iranian's culture, I have to say that in Iran Most of the (Here, CHILDREN is general and you haven't pointed out to a specific group, therefore you mustn't use THE and leave it without any article. Furthermore you must write most children not most of children as MOST CHILDREN narrows the scope while MOST OF CHILDREN implies that most children in a group being referenced to something) children live are living (You are not allowed to change the form of some verbs like LIVE, LIKE, LOVE, and ... to present continues.) with their parents until their marriage.
We are totally attached to our family even when we are 25!
So I have to admit that living in a different city gave me the chance of being free and independent.
although it is hard to live alone (Lonely is an adjective. It describes a feeling of sadness stemming from isolation or abandonment. Alone is also an adjective. It describes a single person or object, separate from others. One who is alone is by oneself.) living lonely, but (Using BUT after using THOUGH, EVEN THOUGH, ALTHOUGH, DESPITE, and IN SPITE OF is absolutely wrong and you mustn't use it as it is a fatal grammatical mistake) I thank Allah for giving me this opportunity.
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Bye Bye Home!
Tomorrow I have to go to another city where my university is located.
My exams will start soon.
I am far away from my family for two weeks.
I know that it is good for me to be in another city and away from my family, being far, because it makes me have to be responsible and independent. I learned how I can manage my money and time in here while I learned to becoming more stronger so that I can solve my problems easily.
for those who aren't Iranian or they don't know Iranian's culture, I have to say that in Iran Most of the children are living with their parents until their they are married.
We are totally attached to our family even when we are 25!
So I have to admit that living in a different city gave me the chance of being free and independent.
although it is hard living alone, I thank Allah for giving me this opportunity.
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