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The monsoon has just come to our country, Myanmar. Everything around smells fresh and green and the weather is just fine enough for us. In our country, basically there are three seasons called the rainy season, the cold season and the hot season. Each has its own signature and attractiveness. But, I prefer the rainy season to the rest. I love everything about the rainy season which includes rain drops, lightning and thunder, the smell of earth after rain, seasonal flowers and fruits, etc. However, floods and storms are exception. Whenever it rains outside, I stay indoors, read a book or watch movie and enjoy the cozy weather to the full. Sometimes I just lie on my bed to hear the sound of raindrops falling over rooftop or I just sit in the balcony to watch raindrops falling to the ground. To me, the sound of rain dropping to the ground is the most beautiful symphony I have ever heard. The way the rain falling is also dramatically beautiful. Plus, lightning and thunder sometimes reinforce in painting the beauty of the nature. There is one more reason why I like the rainy season the most over the other two. This is because the rainy season always reminds me of my childhood life. The memories of my early life just reflect on my mind when it rains outside. And it is very beautiful to me. At times, I wish it could be the rainy season all year round because just four-month duration of the rainy season is not enough for me.
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The monsoon has just come to our country, Myanmar. Everything around smells fresh and green and the weather is just fine enough for us. In our country, basically there are [1] three seasons called the rainy season, the cold season, and the hot season. Each has its own signature and attractiveness. But, I prefer the rainy season to the rest. I love everything about the rainy season which includes rain drops, lightning and thunder, the smell of earth after rain, seasonal flowers and fruits, etc. However, floods and storms are an exception. [2] Whenever it rains outside, I stay indoors, read a book or watch movie and enjoy the cozy weather to the full. Sometimes, I just lie on my bed to hear the sound of raindrops falling over the rooftop, or I just sit on the balcony to watch raindrops falling to the ground. To me, the sound of rain dropping falling [3] to the ground is the most beautiful symphony I have ever heard. The way the rain falling falls is also dramatically beautiful. Plus, lightning and thunder sometimes reinforce in painting the beauty of the nature. There is one more reason why I like the rainy season the most over the other two. This is because {better: that} [4] the rainy season always reminds me of my childhood life. The memories of my early life just reflect on pass through [5] my mind when it rains outside. And it is very beautiful to me. At times, I wish it could be the rainy season all year round because just a four-month duration of the rainy season is not enough for me.1. This is fine, but I suggest slightly restructuring as "there are basically three seasons..." which sounds more natural. "Basically there are..." can sound as though you're preaching or talking down to someone at times (although not in this case), so I would try to avoid it.
2. As separate events (1. floods, 2. storms), it would be "are exceptions".
3. "Dropping" has an image of something heavy (something that would land with a thud), but raindrops are light, so "falling" is better here.
4. The construction when explaining something is: "the reason is that..." or "this is because..." But because "reason" was used in the previous sentence, "It is that" would be the expected structure. {this is a minor point though, either way is understandable}
5. While a person can reflect on something (an idea, memory), it is something intransitive, and the presence of "my mind" here makes it transitive, so it doesn't quite work.
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everyone, this is my free writing for today. please read it and correct it for me. I do appreciate your feedbacks and comments. They are really helpful for me. Thanks a lot😃
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